Personally, I hold the view that highways should be given preferential finacing.

 

Firstly, highways are(lay as) the foundation of (加the) transportation system including public transportation.

（嘿嘿，加上我教你的黄金句型一，会更加连贯：it is universally acknowledged that）The vehicles can(去掉) become useless without(if there are no 感觉比较好) roads. （不要轻易抛弃提纲中的例子：Can you drive your Porsche in a cornfield?）Meanwhile, highways play an important role in the development of a city or a country, because a favorable traffic condition would give a boost to the economic progress(改为development, give boost to the development =achieve progess). The reason is simple(改the reason is that, 一般不用the reason is simple，因为本来就不simple) with an advanced transportation system, better communication can be made(个人感觉这里用主动比较顺，因为句式本来就很复杂了 we can make better communication) with the outside world in terms of commerce, culture, education and science,etc. Some people would argue that there are various ways of communication besides transportation. It is true (加that) our internet technology is booming,（累赘，删掉） and telecommunication is growing, however, we have to mind the fact that a considerable part of our exchange(意义比较模糊，social activities 会不会好一点？) rely on this traditional communication system. Most of us still need to drive to work. right? So you see,（行文大忌：过份口语化，是不是受了杨致远的影响？改为：In this sense, we can safely conclude that ） highways are unreplaceable.

 

Secondly, with regard to the current traffic problem, it is more efficient to improve highways rather than public transportation.

People complain about the noises coming from roads, the harmful gas emitted from cars, the congestion of highways and so on. (加一个Nevertheless,增强语气) Among all these problems, I think, traffic jam rank the top. As people begin to enjoy the fruit of our economic growth one by one, they can afford private cars and as a result, the increasing amount of private cars entail tremendous pressure on the traffic system.(不要企图在一个句子里表达过多的意思，不要太焦急哦hh，其实这句里你用了很多很好的结构。可拆分为两句，我的版本如下，你可在我的版本上修改：The fruit of the economic growth all around the world enables more and more people to own private cars. However, it also entails tremendous pressure on the traffic system.)What's more,(改问号？) nowadays, having a private car has become a tendency which foretell a greater challenge on traffic in the future.（最好进一步的解释一下，比如说owning a private car has become a symbol of middle class families which stimulates more people to pursue it ）

Then comes the question(没有主语，改为here comes the question):how to solve the problem? In my view, enlarging the capacities of exsisting highways as well as building new highways are relatively more efficient than other approaches, though may not thoroughly.(还是那句，不要太焦急，不要一个句子写到底，这个分句放在这里显得很混乱，另起一句：Though it may not be able to solve the problem thoroughly.)

 

In order to improve exsisting highways, we can take such measures as promoting the road surface, upgrading road facilities, strengthening regulations, making adjustments according to different times and situations. Also to build new highways needs not only investments, but reasonable programming of the whole related region.（仔细想想，这一段的point是什么，它与主题的关系是什么？在提纲中有这个内容吗？）

 

Thirdly, we should attach great importance to public transportation, nevertheless, it is not quite helpful on the traffic problem due to its nature or disadvantages, in some sense.（这里的逻辑是：我们要发展公交，虽然它无用。而你的本意是：因为公交对于解决交通问题没有效果，我们不应该在上面花功夫。视译这句话如下：we should not focus on the public transportation, because it is not quite helpful for easing the traffic problem due to its nature or disadvantages. ）

It is easy to list its shortages like it wastes our time to wait for buses or subways; its route is often not the shortest one; it is mostly very crowded in buses, and there is such a long distance between the stations and our real destinations.(两局间衔接不好，可以加上：And what origin lies behind all these shortings?)

I don't agree(用think) it is because that the public transportation is not fully developed. Rather, the orgin is(should be 加强语气) its nature of 'public'. People prefer customized services, that's why they choose private cars, but not because buses or subways aren't attractive. （老问题，不要把几个意思并在一句里。单独一句：Private cars can provide services designed personally for their owners, which can never be realized by buses or subways. Because those public transportations are for all of us,but not any single one of us.）

Therefore we can suppose (加that是一个好习惯，加that 永远不会错，不加的话有时是违背语法的) even if the governments seriously make changes（improvements） on public transportation, rich people still buy their cars and at the same time, those who don't have cars still take buses. Then the conclusion is (尽量不用同一个结构，可改为：Then it turns out that) the group of people who take public transportation is relatively fixed, and it means (that) the changes(improvements) on it perhaps wouldn't lead to changes on(of) its market.  

 

To sum up, I would say, highways are fundamental elements in a traffic system, while public transportation is another significant part of this system, since it is one of a few choices for persons don't own cars. They serve the interests of each other. However, concerning the urgent traffic problem, we (should) focus on highways in order to resolve it efficiently.